Thursday, June 17, 2010

"Townspeople" (Part 6 of 6)

***Spoiler Alert***

This is the final part of a six part story. Read the beginning by following the links below.

Part 1
Part 2
Part 3
Part 4
Part 5

***Spoiler Alert***

by Jason Hart

Part 6 of 6

-Present Day-

Nate used his own key to enter the back door of his house. Should have changed the locks, Lara. Waves of memories came crashing down on him as he made his way through his house. A picture of him and Trey grabbed his attention. He was sitting in a hospital room, hair and clothes disheveled, proudly holding his newborn son. "He has your eyes.", Lara had told him. Nate vigorously shook his head the way one might shake an Etch-a-Sketch to erase the memories, and pressed on through the house. He paused at Trey's bedroom door and listened to Trey's rhythmic breathing, watching as his little chest rose and fell with each breath. He leaned his medium sized frame halfway through Trey's doorway, grabbed the doorknob, and slowly closed the door. It was to be his last humane act of the evening, maybe even his entire life.

He continued on down the hallway towards the master bedroom. Once again, he was caught off guard by a picture - his wedding picture. Any normal man would have had great difficulty looking at his own wedding photo right before murdering his wife - but not Nate. It was like there was a literal connection missing in his brain. He had been in the house now for almost 10 minutes, and now, Nate found himself standing at the threshold of Lara's bedroom door. He paused, then crossed the room and stood beside his sleeping wife. Nate grabbed his gun and gripped it with both hands. He pulled back the hammer, pointed the gun directly at Lara's sleeping body, and squeezed the trigger.


-Sometime in the Past-

Abby successfully finished her treatment and returned home somewhat rehabilitated. Paul's love for Abby had deepened while she was away, and when she came home, he had a diamond ring waiting for her. "Hopefully this one won't draw quite as much attention." he quipped, "You can wear it whenever you feel comfortable." She put it on that next week, and even ventured into town a few times on her own. Slowly, things returned to normal for Paul and Abby. Paul continued his fishing business, and Abby became stronger and more emotionally stable with each passing day. Then, totally unexpectedly, something happened that Paul and Abby had always dreamed of - they got pregnant. The pregnancy progressed without incident, and before he knew it, Paul was sitting in a hospital room, hair and clothes disheveled, proudly holding his baby. "It's a boy!", the doctor informed the proud parents.

Once they had gotten settled in at their home, a crowd of friends gathered to offer their congratulations. One of them spoke up to be heard over the small audience that had formed,

"What is his name?" an indeterminate figure called out.
"His name is Nate.", Paul answered, beaming.

And all the townspeople declared, "Paul, this is very, very good."



Thank you so much for reading, "Townspeople" - I hope you enjoyed it! Stay tuned for "Townspeople: An Analysis" coming early next week.



  1. Great writing and thought provoking story! Reminds me of the story of Joseph and specifically Genesis 50:20, "You intended to harm me, but God intended it all for good. He brought me to this position so I could save the lives of many people." We certainly cannot always see the bigger picture, but it's important to remember there is one.

  2. Ooh. Quite the twist there. This was really well-written, and I didn't see it coming at all! Really interesting to think about good and bad in these terms... :)